Six Sentence Sunday

Even though I did not register this week with the Six Sentence Sunday group, I thought I would put up my six sentences to continue the story. I was actually finishing another WIP (work in progress) and completely spaced what day it was! So I apologize for not doing this sooner.

This story is a young adult paranormal with the heroine, Lizbet, as an exchange student in Nantes, France. She’s seventeen and loving her experience. She comes from a small town in the States and has never traveled before this. I’m still in the beginning of the story. I hope you enjoy it. Also please excuse the lack of posts this week. Have been busy busy writing!

 

The bus roared up and splashed her with water but she didn’t care. She
jumped on as fast as she could and sat as close as she could to the driver. She
looked back indiscreetly and was alarmed to see that Tomas had gotten on as
well. What was she going to do? Lizbet got more panicked as each stop rolled by
and Tomas didn’t get off. She didn’t want him knowing where she lived but also
didn’t want to get off at some secluded stop to have him follow her.

 

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1 Comment (+add yours?)

  1. tricia linden
    Jul 27, 2011 @ 05:39:47

    She didn’t want him knowing where she lived. She also
    didn’t want to get off at some secluded stop to have him follow her.
    Suggestion note: minor change. Break last sentence into two. It gives it more umph. Love the tension.
    Enjoy always, T

    Reply

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